Sentence Unity The following sentences lack unity. Rewrite, correcting the identified fault.
Example (Dangling modifier) When collecting information for new equipment, the Web proved to be my best resource.
Revision When collecting information for new equipment, I found the Web to be my best resource.
- (Dangling modifier) To win the lottery, a ticket must be purchased.
- (Mixed construction) The reason why our boss is such a good manager is because he genuinely listens to employees. 50. (Misplaced modifier) The exciting Mandalay Bay is just one of the fabulous hotels you see strolling along the Las Vegas strip.
- (Dangling modifier) Angered by slow computer service, complaints were called in by hundreds of unhappy users.
- (Zigzag sentence) Fishermen pump money into the local economy when salmon make their annual spawning runs, renting rooms, filling restaurants, and buying supplies from stores and shops in the region
The correct answer and explanation is :
Rewritten Sentences for Unity:
- (Dangling modifier) To win the lottery, one must purchase a ticket.
- (Mixed construction) Our boss is such a good manager because he genuinely listens to employees.
- (Misplaced modifier) Strolling along the Las Vegas Strip, you see the exciting Mandalay Bay as one of the fabulous hotels.
- (Dangling modifier) Angered by slow computer service, hundreds of unhappy users called in complaints.
- (Zigzag sentence) When salmon make their annual spawning runs, fishermen pump money into the local economy by renting rooms, filling restaurants, and buying supplies from stores and shops in the region.
Explanation (300 words):
Sentence unity ensures that all parts of a sentence work together logically and clearly. When a sentence lacks unity, it becomes confusing, misleading, or grammatically incorrect. Below is an explanation of how each correction improves clarity and correctness.
- Dangling Modifier (Lottery Sentence): The original sentence suggests that the ticket itself is winning the lottery, which is illogical. By adding “one must purchase a ticket,” the sentence correctly attributes the action to a person.
- Mixed Construction (Boss Sentence): The original sentence mixes two structures: “The reason why” and “is because,” which is redundant. The revision simplifies it by removing “The reason why” and using “because” directly, making it more concise and grammatically sound.
- Misplaced Modifier (Las Vegas Sentence): The original sentence suggests that the hotel is “strolling along the Las Vegas Strip,” which is incorrect. The revision clarifies that “you” are the one strolling, while Mandalay Bay is something you see.
- Dangling Modifier (Computer Service Sentence): The phrase “Angered by slow computer service” originally modifies “complaints,” which makes no sense. The revision clarifies that the people (users) were angered, making the sentence logical.
- Zigzag Sentence (Fishermen Sentence): The original sentence loses unity by mixing the main idea (economic impact of salmon runs) with a long series of details. The revision keeps unity by clearly stating how fishermen contribute to the economy while maintaining logical flow.
By fixing these errors, the sentences become clearer, grammatically correct, and easier to understand.