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Langan, College Writing Skills with Readings, 11e IM - 1 Copyright 2023 © McGraw Hill LLC. All rights reserved. No reproduction or distribution without the prior written consent of McGraw Hill LLC.Editing for Sentence-Skills Mistakes Locate and correct the ten sentence skills mistakes in the following passage. The mistakes are listed in the box below. As you locate mistakes, place checks in the spaces provided. Then make your corrections directly to the passage.Two sentence fragments ______ ______ One missing comma after introductory words _____ Two run-ons ______ ______ One missing commas around an interrupter ______ ______ One inconsistent verb tense ______ One nonparallel structure ______ One apostrophe mistake ______ Another field that seems to attract eccentric teachers is English. One of my high school English teachers Mr. Karlinsky used to carry a long wooden pointer around the room. When he spotted a student who was not paying attention. He would sneak up from behind and rap the pointer as hard as possible on the student’s desk. The unexpected and earsplitting crack would cause the victims body to rise at least 6 in. from the desk chair.College has its share of strange English teachers as well, for example, one of my professors liked to draw on the board. Dr. Sandlin would stroll around the room, chalk in hand, waiting for the chance to draw something. Then she would spend 30 min of a 50- min class drawing Shakespeare’s Globe Theater or a 17th-century sword. The oddest English teacher I have had was Mr. Shaw, who taught a drama course. Mr. Shaw loved the sound of his own voice, when we read a play, he would take all the parts. Standing behind the lectern Mr. Shaw would run through an entire play by himself. While the students either fell asleep, doing homework for other classes, or read magazines. Mr.Shaw was so happy to be acting he did not seem to mind. At the end of class, as we picked up our books and head out the door, Mr. Shaw could still be heard booming out the end of a scene from Hamlet or The Glass Menagerie.College Writing Skills, 11e John Langan, Zoe Albright (Instructor Manual All Chapters, 100% original verified, A+ Grade) 1 / 4

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.Editing for Sentence Skills Mistakes Locate and correct the 10 sentence skills mistakes in the following passage. The mistakes are listed in the box below. As you locate mistakes, place checks in the spaces provided. Then make your corrections directly to the passage.Two sentence fragments ______ ______ One missing comma after introductory words ______ Two run-ons ______ ______ Two missing commas around an interrupter ______ ______ One inconsistent verb tense ______ One nonparallel structure ______ One apostrophe mistake ______ Another field that seems to attract eccentric teachers is English. One of my high school English teachers, Mr. Karlinsky, used to carry a long wooden pointer around the room. (Commas around an interrupter corrected.) When he spotted a student who was not paying attention, he would sneak up from behind and rap the pointer as hard as possible on the student’s desk.(Fragment corrected.) The unexpected and earsplitting crack would cause the victim’s body to rise at least 6 in. from the desk chair. (Apostrophe corrected.) College has its share of strange English teachers as well. For example, one of my professors liked to draw on the board. (Run-on corrected.) Dr. Sandlin would stroll around the room, chalk in hand, waiting for the chance to draw something. Then she would spend thirty minutes of a 50-min class drawing Shakespeare’s Globe Theater or a 17th-century sword. The oddest teacher I have had was Mr. Shaw, who taught a drama course. Mr. Shaw loved the sound of his own voice. When we read a play, he would take all the parts. (Run-on corrected.) Standing behind the lectern, Mr. Shaw would run through an entire play by himself while the students either fell asleep, did homework for other classes, or read magazines. (Comma after introductory words, fragment, nonparallel structure corrected.) Mr. Shaw was so happy to be acting he did not seem to mind. At the end of class, as we picked up our books and headed out the door, Mr. Shaw could still be heard booming out the end of a scene from Hamlet or The Glass Menagerie. (Inconsistent verb tense corrected.) 2 / 4

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Evaluating an Essay for Coherence

Read the essay below and then answer the questions about coherence that follow.

Labeling Animals

• In some ways, the human race seems to be in its childhood. The conventional

attitude toward animals, for example, makes humanity seem like a tribe of 7-year-olds pulling the wings off flies. Instead of respecting all animals as important parts of the chain of life, humans rate them according to their usefulness. Historically, humankind has failed to recognize animals as anything other than products, toys, or monsters.

• There are the products. These are the animals, such as cattle, pigs, and sheep, that

provide much of the world’s food. For this reason, people tend to think of them less as living creatures than as growing crops, fattening them up, herding them into slaughterhouses, and carving them into edible portions. These animals are “useful,” so the general population has typically positive feelings about them. Humankind’s actions show that most people are not actually fond of them. People are willing to lock baby calves into dark boxes for months and then kill them for veal, or cram thousands of chickens into tiny pens and allow them to live for only 6 weeks. Increased production, not humane treatment, is the bottom line.

• Perhaps the most harmful label that humans pin on animals, though, is that of monster.

The general population has use at all for these creatures. They are taught from birth that sharks, snakes, bats, and alligators, for instance, are evil and dangerous. The facts about these animals make no difference to people’s emotions. The fact that being attacked by a shark is less likely than being struck by lightning does not stop fishermen from holding shark-killing contests. The fact that a snake is harmless does not stop sadistic hikers from crushing it. Very few will ever be mauled by a grizzly or bobcat or torn apart by wolves, yet many support the extermination of these animals in the name of “safety.” D Advertisers label some animals as toys. These are the lucky ones—the puppies, kittens, pandas, koala bears, bunnies, and porpoises that children consider cute. Toys make people feel sentimental and protective. Many are willing to devote 5 min on the evening news to a baby panda, they stock their children’s room with stuffed bunnies, and watch movies about friendly, funny porpoises. No one in their right mind would advocate a puppy-shoot or a koala-killing contest. Toy-like animals may occasionally be neglected or abused by individual owners, but polite society does not allow them to be destroyed on a wholesale basis.

• Labeling animals is not a harmless little quirk that humans have. In separating the

animal kingdom into products, toys, and monsters, society has made it easier to brutalize these defenseless creatures. The practice of categorizing has dulled humanity’s respect for other living beings and even led to the destruction of entire species. As people dominate animals, they forget to behave as caretakers. This results in a loss of dignity and humanity—not only for the victimized animals, but for their human counterparts as well.

• What are the first several words of the sentence to which the transition word First could be

added in the first supporting paragraph? _______ 3 / 4

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• What are the first several words of the sentence to which the transition word However could

be added in the first supporting paragraph? ______

• What word is a synonym for animals in the second supporting paragraph? ______
• To what does the pronoun them refer in the third supporting paragraph? ______
• The emphatic order of the three supporting paragraphs is confused. Which supporting

paragraph should come first? ______ Second? ______ Third? ______

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